How to Write a Resume That Proves Your Value

Hundreds of readers have sent AOL Jobs their resumes asking to be rescued. Combing through the resumes, I see job seekers making similar mistakes when crafting their documents. Here are three representative resumes with common errors in writing strategy and design. Are you making any of these mistakes?


Resume No. 1

1. Vanilla summary. The summary at the top of the resume is so generic it could belong to any candidate. Write about what makes you unique, not what makes you sound like the 500 others competing for the same job.

2. Use of personal attributes with no proof of success. The writer claims he is a great multi-tasker with excellent communication skills. Yet nothing in the resume proves that he possesses these attributes. Why should an employer believe you are any of these things?

3. Lack of accomplishments.The resume reads like a laundry list of job tasks. Tasks that many of your competitors will also be capable of doing. What makes you unique is not the job task you had but rather the impact you had on that job task. Rather than writing about "stuff you did" focus on the value of what you did and how you do things smarter, faster, or more efficiently to move the organization forward.

Analytical, results-oriented professional with extensive experience in the business side of a Fortune 10 telecommunications company. Goal-directed with track-record of contribution of bringing in projects on time and within budget. Strengths include multi-tasking, data analysis and report generation, effective interpersonal and communications skills and solution-oriented customer service.

Areas of expertise include:

· Financial Analysis

· Business Presentations

· Executive Office Support

· Project Management

· Records Management

Professional Experience

XYZ Company-Chesterfield, MO

Office Manager July 2007 – Present

Direct day-to-day office operations for custom homebuilder company, providing fundamental support to Company President and team. Assemble, analyze, reconcile and prepare all financial information to ensure data supports monthly and year-end financials. Work with team to execute the best strategy for scheduling and maintaining a cohesive flow between subcontractors, vendors, and material suppliers.

· Provide ad hoc reports per project utilizing Excel and QuickBooks. so what? what are these reports used for?

· Manage invoicing and billing processes for multiple, complex projects. what kinds of projects?

· Collect, analyze and prepare data for general and worker's comp insurance audits.

· Prepare all project documentation, including contracts, budgets, permits, disbursing, monthly billing, and Addendums to contracts.

· Responsible for payroll preparation, auditing timesheets, expense reports, and bank reconciliation.

· Effectively adjusting priorities and schedules to meet the needs of the business and clients. too vague

· Coordinated and design of the marketing brochure.

· Address inquiries from clients and communicate with homeowners regarding the process and progression of their home.


Resume No. 2

1. Use of a stale objective. An objective explains what type of job you are looking for. Employers don't care what you are looking for. They need to know if you have the skills and experience to solve their business problems. Eliminate the objective and opt for a more comprehensive summary of your tops skills and accomplishments.

2. Obvious typos. Point one in the summary of qualifications states that the candidate is detail-oriented. Unfortunately there is a typo in that sentence. It is going to be hard to convince someone you pay attention to detail when your document contains typos.

3. Vague descriptions. It is not clear from the description of qualifications summary what types of problems this person solves or how she quickly adjusts to new routines. Until you prove these competencies to the reader, they are just words.


Employment Objective:
To work in a position where my experience and training would have valuable application while working in an environment that I enjoy.

Summary of Qualifications: Customer Service/Clerical-Administrative Support

1. Experienced working in a fast-paced, professional environments demanding strong organizational aand detailed-oriented skills. Effective communication and interpersonal skills, relate well with individuals at all levels generating trust, support and teamwork environment.

2. Problem Solving.

3. Proficient in Microsoft Office, AS400 JD Edwards, MDSI system.
Office Equipment Operation.

4. Handle projects responsibly; create executive correspondence as
directed.

5. Accustomed to being entrusted with confidential information.

6. Able to adjust quickly to new routines, procedures and organizations.


Resume No. 3

1. Use of a template. Nothing screams lazy like using a Microsoft template for your resume. There's no better way to say, "presentation isn't very important to me!" Create your own resume format and make sure it doesn't look like the hundreds of documents in the hiring manager's inbox.

2. Wasted space. The category headings for qualifications, experience, etc. are at the far left. Which means there is a lot of wasted space in the document that could have been filled with quality information about your candidacy.


To obtain a challenging and rewarding career with a solid progressive company that offers opportunity for performance based career advancement.

Qualifications

Experience

· A sales, profit and people oriented leader offering twenty years of retail experience.

· Areas of expertise include:

· Financial Development: long and short term goals to exceed company expectations, expenses and inventory control.

· Marketing: ability to create fun and exciting promotional events to attract new guests and energize company associates.

· Merchandising: creative with presentation to maximize store merchandise

2005 to Present Store Manager, XYZ Factory

· Responsible for successful and profitable operation of seven million dollar store

· Fiscal: Ensure store stays within operating budget and meets or exceeds the sales profits and goals

· Merchandising: Establish and evaluate the effective use of merchandise presentation and ensure store management work together to maximize sales and profit.



2002 to 2005 District Manager, ABC Factory

· Responsible for successful and profitable operation of six Burlington Coat Factory Stores

· Responsibilities include leadership in the following areas:



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Liz Gardner

The Email to submit to Resume Rescue will not go through. I keep getting a member unknown message.

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Carole Del Duca

Dear Barbara Safani,

Greetings. I recently submitted my resume for you to critique. I've been an
educator for over 8 years. I went from substitute teaching, to teaching,
resigned to complete a Master's in Ed./Literacy on a full-time basis, got an Interim position as a Reading Specialist for 1 year, now I'm searching again for full-time employment.
Thank you, Carole Del Duca

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